Tuesday, August 10, 2010

I think kid’s at Tamaki Primary School should have swimming twice a year because drowning is the third highest cause of death, so it’s a good idea to learn to swim.

Not many people know 41 people have drowned in the last five month’s because some of our beaches are not safe.

Adults should teach kid’s how to swim so they can survive when swimming on their own.They will be able to help themselves or someone else if they get into trouble.

NZ is surrounded by water so we need to learn how to swim.Learning to swim is exciting, fun and could save your life or someone else’s life.

Ms Hansell I hope I have persuaded you to let us go swimming twice a year.So that we can learn more skills.

By Edward.


Ms Hansell said...

You most certainly have persuaded me that we should have swimming twice a year. We are working on a plan to do that right now. Thanks Edward

Writer's Wall said...

A great piece of persuasive writing Edward. Can you believe that since you wrote this the number of drownings in NZ this year has grown to 51! Swimming lessons are so important. I'm really glad you persuaded Ms Hansell!

Mrs Anderson :)